Author's Note: This creative piece is for a class assignment about a tale of long lost love. I would like to critique my dialogue. It is the cheesiest story I ever wrote.
It was one of those drop-dead hot days, as Leila and her friend Natalie walked done to the local beach. The beach was overly crowded, with kids from school. Since Leila and Natalie were the outcasts from school, there was no way that they would be able make it through alive.
"We should just leave Leila, there's no point in staying if we can't relax," Natalie stated, "Anyways my parents can pick us up and we can go swimming in my pool."
"What's the fun in doing that?"
"Not being humiliated in front of the whole school," she argued.
"Fine, but let's get an ice cream first."
They walked to the local ice cream shop, trying to blend in with everyone else, but of course the Blaine spotted them huddling together.
"Look, the school losers just arrived," he stated as everyone else followed, "I should just throw them in, in might wash the pathetic off of them ," laughter filled the surrounding area.
"I told you Lei, we should have just turned around and left," Natalie scolded.
Leila had her mind on someone else. Her breath caught as she saw him standing there, sunlight dancing in his eyes. Him, as in Jake Wilson, the cutest guy in school.
Natalie yanked Leila out of her day dream as Blaine made another comment, "Might as well leave as this beach is already taken."
"It's a public beach, you don't own it," Leila through back.
"Then how about that bath now?" he asked intimidating her.
It was a miracle someone else stepped in, "Blaine, let's go, we got better things to do than to make fun of harmless girls," Jake told him off.
"Are to standing up for them?" Blaine asked mockingly.
"Yes, they've never done anything to you?"
In a shaky sarcastic voice "Yes."
Leila was about to fall to pieces as that heroic like action from Jake sunk in. No one ever stood up for the losers, except for teachers, who made the situation ten times worse. Especially Jake, someone so popular and noticeable.
"Let's go," Jake said and starting walking away with everyone else following behind. Blaine's face was red hot with embarrassment as he gave some sad looking daunting faces at Leila and Natalie, since they had finally won that battle.
Both girls smiled and concluding their day with some homemade ice cream.
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